Friday, February 9, 2007
Spiritual and Character Goal -- My Semester Goal
I have a character goal for myself. I want to achieve this goal in this semester. My goal is to become more polite to others. I used to make fun of those people who do not know as much as I do, and ignore them when they express their thoughts or so. There are few who do not know as much as I do, though. I used to make fun of a student who couldn’t speak English well at that time, although I was not good at it either. In the movie The Lord of the Rings, Gandalf the wizard says to Frodo, “Don’t judge the lives so recklessly!” when Frodo stated that Bilbo should have killed Smeagol at the time he obtained the ring. So, I decided not to make fun of people just because they do not know much.
My Learning Resolution
Standard 1
Goal: I am going to use strategies to address writing to different audiences.
Method: I will include explanations and definitions according to the audience's background, age, or knowledge of the topic, adjusts formality of style, considers interests of potential readers.
Standard 2
Goal: I am going to use precise and descriptive language that clarifies and enhances ideas and supports different purposes.
Method: i will stimulate the imagination of the reader, to translate concepts into simpler of more easily understood terms, to achieve a specific tone, to explain concepts in literature.
Standard 3
Goal: I am going to use standard format in written composition
Method: I will include footnotes; use italics for works of art, for foreign words and phrases; use bold or underlined headings.
Standard 4
Goal: I am going to use a variety of primary and secondary source information
Method: I will write the motives, credibility, and perspectives of the author; date of publication; use of logic, propaganda, bias, and language; comprehensiveness of evidence.
6 Traits
Goal: I will work more on the voie than any other traits
Method: I will try to put my personality and individuality into my writings and make them unique and interesting.
Goal: I am going to use strategies to address writing to different audiences.
Method: I will include explanations and definitions according to the audience's background, age, or knowledge of the topic, adjusts formality of style, considers interests of potential readers.
Standard 2
Goal: I am going to use precise and descriptive language that clarifies and enhances ideas and supports different purposes.
Method: i will stimulate the imagination of the reader, to translate concepts into simpler of more easily understood terms, to achieve a specific tone, to explain concepts in literature.
Standard 3
Goal: I am going to use standard format in written composition
Method: I will include footnotes; use italics for works of art, for foreign words and phrases; use bold or underlined headings.
Standard 4
Goal: I am going to use a variety of primary and secondary source information
Method: I will write the motives, credibility, and perspectives of the author; date of publication; use of logic, propaganda, bias, and language; comprehensiveness of evidence.
6 Traits
Goal: I will work more on the voie than any other traits
Method: I will try to put my personality and individuality into my writings and make them unique and interesting.
Wednesday, January 31, 2007
Self Assessment -- The Knight and the Grave Villanelle(Villanelle Poem)
Self Assessment
This is a well-written villanelle poem, at least I think. I followed the rules of the villanelle. The rhymes all matched, and the repeating of the two lines weren’t awkward wherever they went. But still there are some problems I have to fix.
First, I have to be specific what all the rhyming words mean. For example, on the fourth stanza second row, it is written that I cannot move as though I am in front of judge. But not always can’t anyone move, even though all the juries, the prisoner, the witnesses, and the lawyers can’t move unless the judge allows them to. So I think I should work on that row to make more understandable to the audiences.
Second, I should work on the sentence fluency. Some sentences don’t seem to be quite fluent. So, I think I should try to make the sentences more fluent.
This is a well-written villanelle poem, at least I think. I followed the rules of the villanelle. The rhymes all matched, and the repeating of the two lines weren’t awkward wherever they went. But still there are some problems I have to fix.
First, I have to be specific what all the rhyming words mean. For example, on the fourth stanza second row, it is written that I cannot move as though I am in front of judge. But not always can’t anyone move, even though all the juries, the prisoner, the witnesses, and the lawyers can’t move unless the judge allows them to. So I think I should work on that row to make more understandable to the audiences.
Second, I should work on the sentence fluency. Some sentences don’t seem to be quite fluent. So, I think I should try to make the sentences more fluent.
Self Assessment -- Backstreet(Cinquain Poem 2)
Self Assessment
Frankly, I have got nothing to comment about my poem. Because I don’t see any mistakes in organizations, since the poem is too short, and doesn’t seem to need much grammar and ending punctuations. Also, I don’t see any spelling mistake, and I don’t see any sentence that doesn’t seem to fit on the topic of my poem.
But there is a problem. This is the only problem I see in this poem. I am not saying that this word doesn’t fit in the context, but I think there are many better words that can be put instead of using “vomiting,” or I think I should explain more about the word specifically, which is almost impossible in this poem. I think I should try to work on that word.
Frankly, I have got nothing to comment about my poem. Because I don’t see any mistakes in organizations, since the poem is too short, and doesn’t seem to need much grammar and ending punctuations. Also, I don’t see any spelling mistake, and I don’t see any sentence that doesn’t seem to fit on the topic of my poem.
But there is a problem. This is the only problem I see in this poem. I am not saying that this word doesn’t fit in the context, but I think there are many better words that can be put instead of using “vomiting,” or I think I should explain more about the word specifically, which is almost impossible in this poem. I think I should try to work on that word.
Self Assessment -- Saipan Tourist(Process Poem)
Self Assessment
I have been reading my poem. It was quite boring, and I couldn’t understand what I am talking about. Even though I enjoyed reading most parts of my poem, I have lots to be revised yet.
First, my poem isn’t organized very well. I just listed the events that are going to happen and things I am going to do. I don’t have the exact time when or where these events that are happening and things I am going to do. I just listed the events and things I am going to do in several lines. I think I should work on that.
Second, the voice of the poem is not easily told. The voice of the poem is not clearly recognizable. I just listed the events and things you are going to do, but the voice is not seen clearly. I don’t have any sentence that can reveal my own voice. I think I should work on that. I will try to put more sentences that reveal my voice, and the things I really wanted to tell to the tourists through this poem.
Last, I have to work on the word choice. All the words used in my poem are simple and don’t contain much feeling of my poem. All of the words in my poem are really boring. I should consider the words that I am using, and change the words into some better words.
I have been reading my poem. It was quite boring, and I couldn’t understand what I am talking about. Even though I enjoyed reading most parts of my poem, I have lots to be revised yet.
First, my poem isn’t organized very well. I just listed the events that are going to happen and things I am going to do. I don’t have the exact time when or where these events that are happening and things I am going to do. I just listed the events and things I am going to do in several lines. I think I should work on that.
Second, the voice of the poem is not easily told. The voice of the poem is not clearly recognizable. I just listed the events and things you are going to do, but the voice is not seen clearly. I don’t have any sentence that can reveal my own voice. I think I should work on that. I will try to put more sentences that reveal my voice, and the things I really wanted to tell to the tourists through this poem.
Last, I have to work on the word choice. All the words used in my poem are simple and don’t contain much feeling of my poem. All of the words in my poem are really boring. I should consider the words that I am using, and change the words into some better words.
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